Poem




Posted by Ayu

I wrote this the other day and, I wanted to hear your opinions. It's not exactly the best, but it was my first try. So, please go easy.

I wear this broken smile
In order to hide what I feel
The light of happiness
Never reaches the depths of my eyes
Forever filling them with darkness
You left me alone to live with this pain
So now I lay here
Crying out to your blessed face
And hoping you




Posted by Omni

It beats Sean Fury's poetry any day, except in how much I laugh while reading it. No further comment will be made by me at this time.




Posted by Arcadios

Hmmm...so many people it can apply to.
:(
It was great thou.




Posted by NeXidala

You sure are sad a lot. =/

Nice poem though. =]]




Posted by Ayu


Quoting NeXidala: You sure are sad a lot. =/


I actually wrote this when I was quite happy..Go figure. >>



Posted by BLUNTMASTER X

Zeta
Like Kefka
A **** good son
of a submariner
I am his Samus
and he,
my Belmont
We embrace
for an age
before the next page
of a DA thread
about our going to bed

- By Sanaxis?

:love:

That poem was pretty good, though.




Posted by NEMI

Even though it was sad, it was pretty good. Do you do this often?




Posted by Ayu


Quoting NEMI: Even though it was sad, it was pretty good. Do you do this often?


Actually, no. My friend forced me to try a bit of poetry the other day and that's how it came out. I didn't expect so many responses..

Wow, you know what's really sad? I was actually very entertained by The X's poem. >>



Posted by Yonaka

Pretty good poem. As stated earlier it could apply to a lot of people. I like it.