I watched her as she lay there, sleeping,
I wondered if she saw the child there standing,
If she heard my sisters
Wow, I know you posted this up a while ago, but I hope you do get to read this comment. I could tell a lot of feeling was put into this poem. I really liked it. The structure seemed a bit loose, but it definitely had an affect on me. I could really envision this happening and feel what the speaker is feeling. Keep writing, this was a really nice poem.
That wasn't so bad. The fact that it wasn't done entirely in rhyming couplets or angsty "kill everyone" blank verse makes it stand out on vgc, and it was actually genuinely well written.
Nice.
Thanks, guys.
[FONT="]This is an open transgress poem, if I'm not mistaken. Nevertheless, it stands remarkably beautiful. I'm sure others will agree that the forums need more poets like you.
~Kudos!
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sad,but deepens the emotion, I thought your poem was fantastic! keep
posting more, I love your poetry!
I was just browsing through, and I was pleasantly surprised to see such a quality of poetry on a video game forum.